Book 3 Blurb 2.0

I’d love to get your feedback on this! Here’s my new blurb for book 3 – All the King’s-Men

More than a hundred years ago, a king declared that all geniuses, scientists and inventors were abominations, save for those willing to become his Conventioneers. His edict spread like wildfire to the other kingdoms, and drove the hunted into the arms of the secret societies, the Tub and the Fare.

Decades later, having taken control of the remains of the crushed Fare, a young Marcus Pieman follows up on rumors of a homeless, teenage Abominator in his city. When the scared Nikolas Klaus looked up at Marcus for the first time, a tremendous bond was forged. Has Nikolas been part of Marcus’ plans from the beginning? Has Marcus been a pawn of the original Fare the entire time?

A betrayal leads Tee to a showdown with her greatest foe. Who breaks and who lays bleeding in the middle of nowhere?

And Mounira learns the truth about the once great inventor, Christophe Creangle.

6 thoughts on “Book 3 Blurb 2.0

  1. Debbie O

    Being a big fan of The Yellow Hoods this gave me shivers. Stepping back from being a fan, it would really make me want to catch up on the preceding two books. Therefore, in my opinion? Mission definitely accomplished!!

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  2. rawlse

    Great! Maybe tweak the 2nd paragraph a tiny bit, like:

    When the scared Nikolas Klaus looked up at Marcus for the first time, a tremendous bond was forged. “But” has Nikolas been part of Marcus’ plans from the beginning? “And” has Marcus been a pawn of the original Fare the entire time?

    I think adding “But” and “And” make the paragraph flow better and help in the intrigue of it all 🙂 At least, that’s my little suggestion.

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  3. Dylan Hearn

    I think it looks great. If I could make a couple of suggestions. First, you could change “and drove the hunted into the arms of the secret societies” to “and drove those he hunted into the arms of the secret societies”
    Second, the last two sentences don’t link to what you’ve written before (but clearly involve characters from the first two books). Perhaps you could add a sentence in beforehand, saying something along the lines of “In All The King’s Men, we get to follow the further adventures of a number of much loved characters from The Yellow Hoods series:”

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      1. Adam Dreece Post author

        As for the “he hunted” versus “the hunted” is because across the kingdoms, well beyond the borders of that king, the geniuses and inventors became hunted by royals.

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